Last week, I bought a Social Battery X2000. Your ad said it’d last for eight hours, but mine died in the middle of my wife's office happy hour. And, well, it might have ruined my marriage | Fiction
Having read it several times now, I'm still in awe that you created a universe of possibilities in a short narrative that is completely relatable. brilliant.
I think he bought the wrong battery. I imagine that his wife's preference of Brad had less to do with how social he was in group settings, and more about their connection at other times.
I know I'm reading too much into it, but that was my thought, haha.
I love that, Grant. You're reading exactly the right amount into it. One of the themes I wanted to explore with this piece is how we lean on technology to solve all our problems, and oftentimes, they end up causing more of them. You hit (one of) the nail(s) on the head :)
Your hermit crab series is such a good reminder that impactful storytelling can take any format—in fact, it’s often the unconventional formats and styles that resonate more!
Exactly. No matter the form—whether it’s literature, copywriting, or screenplays—length doesn’t really matter. What actually counts is how fascinating people find your writing. Glad to see my stories are making an impact!
Very interesting story 🤔 I see in this story an invitation to think about easy, fast solutions from outside of a system. When started the problem with Ralph's wife? Was that not long before he bought his social battery? Was he focusing on the problems or the things he can do? ... There are a lot of open questions and anyone can easily feel the gaps with his/her own life experience, goals, expectations and ways to deal with something. Thank you Jack for an other great story!
Excellent. I wrote a short that includes some ad copy and disclaimers recently. If it doesnt get picked up by any of the places Ive submitted to, I'll share it here. Its the best short Ive written so far.
Looks like he bought his social battery from Temu. I really enjoy the parody on the social battery concept. Hopefully Ralph gets his refund.
Thanks Adam!
Having read it several times now, I'm still in awe that you created a universe of possibilities in a short narrative that is completely relatable. brilliant.
Thank you so much, Steve. Really means the world :) I have so many more stories coming your way. Can't wait to share them with you!
Agreed
I really liked it! I almost want to know more- like a part 2!
Hmmmm that may be a possibility.
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Thank you, Jess!
I love this so much! I find writing short stories so hard.. to be able to convey something in so little… but this was inspiring!
The key is to write implicitly! Hemingway was great at this. I'd encourage you to read his short stories :)
And thank you so so much for reading, Ally :)
That’s a great idea! Thanks :)
I think he bought the wrong battery. I imagine that his wife's preference of Brad had less to do with how social he was in group settings, and more about their connection at other times.
I know I'm reading too much into it, but that was my thought, haha.
I love that, Grant. You're reading exactly the right amount into it. One of the themes I wanted to explore with this piece is how we lean on technology to solve all our problems, and oftentimes, they end up causing more of them. You hit (one of) the nail(s) on the head :)
Your hermit crab series is such a good reminder that impactful storytelling can take any format—in fact, it’s often the unconventional formats and styles that resonate more!
Exactly. No matter the form—whether it’s literature, copywriting, or screenplays—length doesn’t really matter. What actually counts is how fascinating people find your writing. Glad to see my stories are making an impact!
This was a brilliant read!!
Thanks so much for reading, Edward. Really appreciate it!! :)
You've created an interesting world here. I'd love to hear more stories from it.
Thanks very much! Think there may be a follow up on the way :)
I look forward to it.
Love the concept. Seems kinda dystopian!
Are our phones simply our social batteries at the moment?
Something to ponder
Very interesting story 🤔 I see in this story an invitation to think about easy, fast solutions from outside of a system. When started the problem with Ralph's wife? Was that not long before he bought his social battery? Was he focusing on the problems or the things he can do? ... There are a lot of open questions and anyone can easily feel the gaps with his/her own life experience, goals, expectations and ways to deal with something. Thank you Jack for an other great story!
Thank you for the thoughtful content Theo! Really appreciate your support :) (I’ll have those notes ready for you soon!)
Also sorry for autocorrect’s misspelling of your name, Tudo*! :)
We know that he's doing that on purpose! 😉
Excellent. I wrote a short that includes some ad copy and disclaimers recently. If it doesnt get picked up by any of the places Ive submitted to, I'll share it here. Its the best short Ive written so far.
Would love to read it. Let me know if you post it!
Forgot to mention that it is also selling a sort of futuristic fictional service. Quite a bit in common with this one.